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Boredom grabs me and pulls me in.
I struggle to break free,
But I can't.

People around me are talking,
Listening,
Watching.

I need to escape.
My mind is slow,
And I'm swimming in it.
©2005-2009 ~AshInTheNothing
:iconashinthenothing:

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In college on a free and I'm bored. Excuse how bad this piece is.

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:iconangelsandlillies:
That's really cool. I like the part where U say: 'I need to escape. My mind is slow, And I'm swimming in it.'. U are getting better at poetry and are always superb. You are perfect remain that way .
:iconentrpy:
Haha. I know the feeling. Great poem.

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:iconx-takara-x:
This is good, I also like the first stanza. Tis true cause boredom does drag you in and it feels as tho there is no escape, you have put perfect emotions and feelings into words. Well done.
:iconashinthenothing:
I'm not perfect, nobody is but thank you for that comment :hug:

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"There's something inside me that pulls beneath the surface."
:iconashinthenothing:
Thanks.

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"There's something inside me that pulls beneath the surface."
:iconashinthenothing:
Hehe.

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"There's something inside me that pulls beneath the surface."
:iconashinthenothing:
Thanks.

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"There's something inside me that pulls beneath the surface."
:iconwordlytruths:
I struggle to break free, This line is great. I love it.
I love the feeling of paranoia that I get from the second stanza. This is good.

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